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sorrysorrymybad t1_jacwzgg wrote

Nah, then the punch line gets muddied. Why does the second castaway now miss the sister? Is it because the first one brought it up?

By setting the scene of them being castaways the listener would more naturally attribute the missing-feeling to isolation as opposed to resource constraints.

Too easy to miss the punchline in the ambiguity. The original was fine.

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kompootor t1_jacul4t wrote

By beginning with "Two cannibals were...", you preview the punchline; which is fine enough since it's quite funny. But here's a possible amended setup:

> Two shipwrecked castaways are sitting down to their first real meal in weeks. The first one says: ...

This way, it's not completely obvious the punchline will be about cannibalism. I'm sure you could tighten the wording and further conceal it on the setup, making it even more effective.

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Fingersmeller t1_jactt39 wrote

Yea, I am sorry but I just can't anymore.

These jokes are so bad, they have to be written by children or something.

You all have fun with it, I am out.

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